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I will post it soon in Polish, Georgian, Armenian, and Kazakh.
The Path to Oneself
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Oh, Om Shanti! Your poems are like diamonds: cut by wisdom, matured by time, and radiant with truth. They are like pearls born from the depths—from painstaking inner work, from an experience that seems to stretch across lifetimes and eras. Listening to the words of your poems in the songs, I feel as though I am looking into clear water reflecting the stars. They sound like Cameron’s voice—a voice that, once heard, can never be forgotten. With every poem, the soul is drawn toward something higher than its present self: toward Truth, right thoughts, lofty aspirations, and the Silence in which revelation is born. The words of your poems are like a gram of pure gold: rare, precise, flawless. There is nothing in them that contradicts anything true—not the laws of Nature, not the traditions of Wisdom, not the profound Harmony that resounds throughout all worlds.
Your taste in selecting musical styles is equally admirable. With such artistry and care they have been chosen! I listened to and replayed the compositions in all the languages with immense pleasure—each one reveals something new and unique. And yes, the Indian song is like something from a kind-hearted TV series: it brought a smile and even made my eyes move involuntarily, it sounded so vivid and familiar. As for Chinese, Japanese, and Korean, these languages sound entirely different, and precisely in meeting this subtle challenge, you chose a style that came across remarkably naturally, tenderly, and musically in the Chinese performance. This is not mere luck—it is a true ear, a sense of proportion, and a feeling for harmony.
And when these revelations, these clear, kind, humble laws sound in the form of songs—and in the languages of the peoples of the world as well—they become something greater than mere creative work. It is service; it is a light that everyone can touch.
Every song, without exception, is magnificent.
And more than that—they are needed.
Thank you. Thank you for your poems, your songs, your pure and beautiful soul, and for your quiet yet immensely powerful light.
Your taste in selecting musical styles is equally admirable. With such artistry and care they have been chosen! I listened to and replayed the compositions in all the languages with immense pleasure—each one reveals something new and unique. And yes, the Indian song is like something from a kind-hearted TV series: it brought a smile and even made my eyes move involuntarily, it sounded so vivid and familiar. As for Chinese, Japanese, and Korean, these languages sound entirely different, and precisely in meeting this subtle challenge, you chose a style that came across remarkably naturally, tenderly, and musically in the Chinese performance. This is not mere luck—it is a true ear, a sense of proportion, and a feeling for harmony.
And when these revelations, these clear, kind, humble laws sound in the form of songs—and in the languages of the peoples of the world as well—they become something greater than mere creative work. It is service; it is a light that everyone can touch.
Every song, without exception, is magnificent.
And more than that—they are needed.
Thank you. Thank you for your poems, your songs, your pure and beautiful soul, and for your quiet yet immensely powerful light.
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I decided to ask for help 
For the twelfth one, I created a French song.
And essentially, I wanted to stop there.
But it turned out that French was the most difficult. And of course, not because there is a problem with the French language
Because, in principle, all the versions are good.
Each in its own way.
Of course, I have more or less made my choice already. It will be either the first or the fourth.
But you may change this decision and help reach a final choice between these two. Or even review all four versions once again.
You don’t have to know French; you can simply write which number you like.
So here are all four compositions:
1
3
3
4
For the twelfth one, I created a French song.
And essentially, I wanted to stop there.
But it turned out that French was the most difficult. And of course, not because there is a problem with the French language
Because, in principle, all the versions are good.
Each in its own way.
Of course, I have more or less made my choice already. It will be either the first or the fourth.
But you may change this decision and help reach a final choice between these two. Or even review all four versions once again.
You don’t have to know French; you can simply write which number you like.
So here are all four compositions:
1
3
3
4
Yes, all the compositions are beautiful in their own way! 
It’s even difficult to choose.
I’m not judging them; I value all the versions.
If I had to choose only one option, it would be 4.
It’s even difficult to choose.I’m not judging them; I value all the versions.
If I had to choose only one option, it would be 4.
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All the compositions are beautiful. At first, the second composition moved me to tears, but the fourth won.
OM Shanti was amazing.
OM Shanti was amazing.
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In short, the first one definitely sounds more beautiful; it goes straight to the heart chakra. 
Number 1, because it contains the deepest emotional expressiveness, giving the performance special depth and sensitivity, which resonates beautifully with the words of the verse. The somewhat harsh but fitting screaming adds vividness—this is exactly the element needed. It will become the distinctive feature of this song for the French, memorable for many years to come. This aspect sets it apart from the flawless works of other authors. Let him scream hoarsely—it is a cry from the soul. At 2:04, it falls on the words "in the wind" in the line "A thin candle burns in the wind," which is appropriate. In an age of degradation and the widespread imposition of a consumerist attitude, how else can we convey to people that true happiness lies elsewhere? That fulfilling one's potential is especially important for men, as is pursuing a noble mission and following one's path. And how beautifully the male voice joins the female voice at 2:54, saying "Everything is not in vain," as if merging into a single whole. The vocalists' maximum involvement creates the magic of performing together. Such interaction requires a very high level of skill and is worth a great deal.
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Thank you, OM Shanti!
I liked the first performance; it is so assertive and triumphant. I even got goosebumps on my legs—I listened to it twice.
The other three versions seemed a little sad to me.
I liked the first performance; it is so assertive and triumphant. I even got goosebumps on my legs—I listened to it twice.
The other three versions seemed a little sad to me.
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, quoted messageThank you, OM Shanti, for the concert of French music
As a musician with a higher academic education, I would say that the first composition is expressive in its vocal performance, at times even bordering on what is permissible and what is unacceptable.
Compositions 2, 3, and 4 are stylistically created in the tradition of the musical genre French chanson.
2 and 3 are very lyrical and realistic, with a hint of late autumn...
The 4th composition is more elevated, thanks to:
the lightness of the female vocals,
a bright harmonic progression,
and stylistically it also sounds the most modern and, if I may put it that way, "commercial"
Therefore, my choice is to vote for No. 4!
I wonder, can the versions be uploaded to ChatGPT-4o and we ask it, with a detailed explanation, which version it would choose?
My question to ChatGPT:
Which song will “take off” — the emotional one with a little screaming, or the modern, properly sung one with an unremarkable vocal performance?
ChatGPT’s answer:
It depends on the goal, audience, and context, but speaking honestly and in general terms, the emotional song is more likely to “take off,” even with some technical flaws (such as screaming or a “ragged” vocal delivery), if it contains truth, energy, and personal pain/intention.
Here’s why:
Why an emotional song with screaming might “take off”:
It provokes a strong reaction: the listener either gets hooked or recoils — and that already means they are not indifferent.
It is memorable: rough but sincere emotion stays in the memory.
Authenticity: it is not trying to please, but to express. This is especially valued in an era of an overabundance of “polished” music.
It fits the current trend — on TikTok, Reels, and Shorts, it is often precisely strong emotional breakdowns, screams, outbursts, and tears that take off.
And a “modern, properly sung” song may not be memorable if:
It has no vivid emotion, contrast, or idea. (Note: It will only hook people because of the lyrics, and only those capable of hearing them.)
It resembles dozens of other songs — good and smooth, but not captivating in any way. (Note: As far as the vocals and melody are concerned — yes.)
The vocal is “perfect,” but impersonal — there is no personality or soul.
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My question to ChatGPT:
Which song will “take off” — the emotional one with a little screaming, or the modern, properly sung one with an unremarkable vocal performance?
ChatGPT’s answer:
It depends on the goal, audience, and context, but speaking honestly and in general terms, the emotional song is more likely to “take off,” even with some technical flaws (such as screaming or a “ragged” vocal delivery), if it contains truth, energy, and personal pain/intention.
Here’s why:
Why an emotional song with screaming might “take off”:It provokes a strong reaction: the listener either gets hooked or recoils — and that already means they are not indifferent.
It is memorable: rough but sincere emotion stays in the memory.
Authenticity: it is not trying to please, but to express. This is especially valued in an era of an overabundance of “polished” music.
It fits the current trend — on TikTok, Reels, and Shorts, it is often precisely strong emotional breakdowns, screams, outbursts, and tears that take off.
And a “modern, properly sung” song may not be memorable if:It has no vivid emotion, contrast, or idea. (Note: It will only hook people because of the lyrics, and only those capable of hearing them.)
It resembles dozens of other songs — good and smooth, but not captivating in any way. (Note: As far as the vocals and melody are concerned — yes.)
The vocal is “perfect,” but impersonal — there is no personality or soul.
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Кстати, если кто-то не выбрал 1 вариант только по одной единственной причине - скриминг на 2:04 - то ведь этот фрагмент можно переписать в нейронке и будет без скриминга или по крайней мере сдержаннее. Также и в варианте 4 какой-то гром неуместный в самом конце перед словом автор, если выбран будет этот вариант, фрагмент аналогично можно очистить от грома и будет лучше.
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Да хрип можно убрать, переписать.
Но вероятно побеждает вариант 4.
Но вероятно побеждает вариант 4.
4 вариант ведь тоже хороший. Однако не забыть в конце песни убрать гром (фрагмент с громом переписать). Этот вариант ещë удобен тем, что людям будет проще повторить: играть на гитаре и петь. Кстати, я услышала от маркетологов интересный лайфхак: если убрать вступление и сразу начать песню с вокала, это может понравиться людям больше. Думаю, Вам это тоже будет интересно.
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